One Rainy Day
In silence of after rains,
Intoxication airs earths wet clay,
Seeing children in mud water play,
In midst of melody,was I struck halfway-
Lost!My image in puddle shuddered and stared.
Droplet said unto me in unheard prayer,
Light'ning created me with pureness sheer,
Virginity I lost,with mud I smeared,
ad infinitum pain,in three worlds I fared,
Search thou!this birth yours is much too rare.
Conversation dropped,earth swallowed the drop,
Trembling I went!fearing for my body crop,
Creaking sounds shouted aloud-'Ye'?where to where frog,
Darkness enveloped,listless and lost- afar a faint rainbow sparked,
Enlightened my path and on a serene destiny got my soul embarked!
(Last line contributed by Sikhi Seeker)
posted by samar @ 10:19 AM
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One Rainy Day
In silence of after rains
Intoxication airs earths wet clay
Seeing children in mud water play
In midst of melody, was I struck halfway-
Lost! My image in puddle shuddered and stared.
Droplet said unto me in unheard prayer,
Lightning created me with pureness sheer,
Virginity I lost, with mud I smeared,
ad infinitum pain, in three worlds I fared,
Search thou! This birth yours is much too rare.
Conversation dropped, earth swallowed the drop
Trembling I went! Fearing for my body crop
Creaking sounds shouted aloud-'Ye'? Where to where frog
Darkness enveloped, listless and lost- afar a faint rainbow sparked,
Enlightened my path and on a serene destiny got my soul embarked!
(Until you find another fitter...heres my take)
'If i could, i'd frame para 2 - incredible!'
God bless!
Sat Sri Akaal!
Thanks a lot for your nice contribution.Its really very satisfying to get response from you,as it takes considerable time'n'effort for the favor i asked for.
Though your lines fit in,i will slightly manipulate your contribution.
And yes,please do better me,lets try and arrive iteratinely at a near perfect line.
my take:
Enlightened my path,on Guru's way got my soul embarked.
OR
Guru!guru!my heart barked,embracing tight- mind larked.
Please someone,do update.I am running out of options.
Naam Chit Aave.
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